In Paris,
we became a silent film.
Cigarette smoke wafts
between lives in bars and rafters
hung low on lantern glow.
Tar and wine and burning francs
lick envelopes of bygone epistles.
In the booth,
a boy forgets to change the reel.
Final frames flick, black to dusty.
En français:
A Paris,
Nous sommes devenu cinéma muet.
La fumée de cigarette flotte
entre les vies dans les bars et les chevrons
accrochés à la faible lueur de la lanterne.
Goudron, vin et incendies de francs
léchent les enveloppes d'anciens épîtres.
Dans la cabine,
un garçon oublie de changer la bobine.
Images finales crépitant, noires puis poussièreuses.
©2008-2009 =bekkia
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This poem makes me happy, though I am so sick.
My french is iffy. Help, if you can. (some people helped me fix it. Thanks to all)
And thanks to ^LadyLincoln for the DD!
My french is iffy. Help, if you can. (some people helped me fix it. Thanks to all)
And thanks to ^LadyLincoln for the DD!
Daily Deviation, 2008-06-08
In Paris by =bekkia, has an old fashioned feel to it that is rather irresistible. The French version is also a very nice touch. (Featured by ^LadyLincoln)
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CommentsWow this is really beautiful, really vivid... and I\'m sorry you\'re sick
 -- Spark Bright Free Webzine, open for submissions now [link] I'm glad you like it. I'm okay with being sick as long as I can write pretty things.
-- The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest "I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish =Wordspill! yeah I get what you mean... Still, hope you feel better soon
 -- Spark Bright Free Webzine, open for submissions now [link] thanks
-- The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest "I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish =Wordspill! Wow I like it, good description an it makes me happy too!
-- "It's better to burn out than to fade away"-Neil Young In case anyone is interested, heres my gallery [link] thanks
-- The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest "I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish =Wordspill! Thank you
 -- The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest "I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish =Wordspill! Beautiful imagery. It sounds sad to me.
Very nice I like the feel of the poem, one thing that I don\'t understand very well is the last line though, \"black to dusty\"
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